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The Impact of the Internet on Interpersonal Communication As the contemporary society develops dramatically, an obvious problem that Internet has an impact on the communication which is among individuals has sprung up. For example, it is an universal phenomenon for us to chat with each other on the Internet at the technological age. In addition, both of QQ and WeChat are extremely helpful for the interpersonal communication. We can understand family, friends and another people better. Plus, we can also get more useful and latest information in time from the Internet. All in all, I insist that the Internet plays a significant role in the interpersonal communication. And there is no doubt that this production will become stronger and last forever in the future.
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