文章词汇表达比较丰富,但学术词汇稍显欠缺,此外拼写检查要重视;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;采用了一些简单的从句。
Nowday,parents do anything from their children.It is has become a very common matter in social. For example children who is 12 years old go to school by his parents.parents always overdoing in taking care of their children.However it is not advantaged to children to grow up. well how is the parent do.First encouraged them and let them do something witch can do by themselfy. Besides,teach the knowledge about how to care themselfy when at home alone.Last but not least talk children"If you do something error you should pay the responsibility