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Nowday,parents do anything from their children.It has become a very common. For example children 12 years old whom go to school by his parents..However it is not advantaged to children to grow up. well how is the parent do.First encouraged them and let them do something witch can do by themselfy. Besides,teach the knowledge about how to care themselfy when at home alone.Last but not least talk children"If you do something error you should pay the responsibility