2010-2012全国中考英语试题汇编试题(69)写作:我的朋友李雷

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I have a good fridend，he name is LI Lei。he 14 years old，but he younger than me。he likes basketball ，swimming，drawing and music。he palyes basketball is best in our class。he favorite star is Michael Jordan， he favorite food is fish and chips I can make a lough to him he very friendly。This is my friend。