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Altought we have our chinese traditional festivals,there are an increasing number of people tending to pay more attention to western festivals.It seems to me that the causes of this phenomenon is that a marvelous number of people admire and are curious about western festivals,and this trend may affect us a lot. In positive effect,the celebration of western festivals may help people to know the outside world certainly.As we all know, festival is a crucial part of a nation's culture.and most of the traditional festivals come from a long history,and we can learn about a country by celebrating its festivals.On the contrary,celebrating the western festivals may give rise to ignore our own traditional festivals,and this phenomenon may be a obstacle for developing our culture. we no need to be against celebrating the western festivals ,but we must put our own traditional festivals on the first position.
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