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I hava a classmate,his name is Dive.But , when he play football with his friends,he is burn his foot in last week.He is so sad, beacese he can't go to school with us.When the teacher,classmate and me heard this think,we will go to his home and help his songthing.Some classmate cleaned flool for him,and teacher teached his lesson,and i was take he to the hospital.So,he is more and more better.The feel from this think,I feel good people is to many.
