2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词，衔接手法做的很棒；丰富从句的使用，文章会更出色；文章词汇表达比较丰富，但学术词汇稍显欠缺，此外拼写检查要重视；请注意分段。

I was went to the bookstore and bought a thick netbook this morning .i want my homework recorded in it till I’m old enough.wait till I white-haired,I sitting in the courtyard,watching the children play slapstick,and then take out my English diary slowly aftertaste,maybe that time my talha had forgotten my existence,but notes the benefits is here,no matter how many years past,will never changed like photograph.so I have an other hope,I want to take a picture with talha,just him and me.i will put it in my notebook.