采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;建议适当增加些复杂句的使用;拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;请注意分段。
Nowadays,more and more undergraduates complaint that finding work is difficult.The reasons of leading to this phenomenon are as follows.First of all,they spent much time in learning special subjects.Only when they started to find work,they realized their own lacking necessary profession practice.Next,competing among undergraduates become more and more strain,which lead to whichever undergraduate will have a smaller chance to find jobs.therefore,having a suggestion that undergraduates often find a job on the side,so that accumulate lots of relative work experience.