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As society develops,many people like watching Spring Festival evening,there are a wide-spread concern over whether it should be cancel or not. As to whether it is blessing or a curse,however,people take different attitudes.One support this idea,but the other against .As far as I am concerned,I am inclined to be on the side of the latter view,beacuse I think the Spring Festival evening is the symbol of the Spring Festival and a relax activity as a entertainment,it couldn't be cancel,to some extent it represents our nation.So it shouldn't be cancel.