文中词汇较灵活,但要注意积累学术词汇,拼写错误也要注意;全文结构较为严谨;可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用。
As we all know, most of the people success upon intelligence and strong will,but in my opinion, the strong will is more important,nothing success without a strong will . The strong will is vital guarantee of succes.Maybe we will get many though in our life,but as long as we have a kind of spiritual, which is 'Don't give up'.We must learn to face abstacle of life,we must be a success man. We have a kind of mission when we was born.As we increasingly old ,our life become more complex.So,if we want to do something better,or best,we must have strong will.In our social ,there are many people insist the their mind. For example,AiDiSheng,....... As a student,i think that we can't get high score if we don't hard study