拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
With the development of technology and fierce of society competition,more and more students are facing with mental question.We should do something to improve student's mental health. Many measures should be done by school.Firstly, the school should pay more attention to student's mental health,not only care records.Record doesn't represent student's ability,more attention should be paid to student's life.Secondly,school should relieve the student's stress,encourage them to take more activities.which help them relaxed and relieve stress.Lastly,school should arrange a teacher particularly to help student solve their mental problems. Certainly,students also do something,after all it is important to them.Students should study how to deal with mental problems,when they meet these problems, they should adopt effective measures to tackle them.Under the help of school student will improve their mental health.