文中衔接词和过渡词使用的很棒;注意文中个别的句子错误;作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达,但要多积累学术词汇;请注意分段。
I've just heard a news from one of my classmate that we will have a new guy who will to be our English teacher. To be honest,before I have no idea about that,that is because I don't care who will be our new teacher, I hated to study English, I think the course was very boring. but when I really saw him and face to him, I changed my mind.He was really surprised me when I saw him at the first time,he is alway keeps smiling, the smile is very shy and gentle but powerful, and he has a fastic voice,it's can be make me feeling warming.and he also have a pair of eyes who are very bright, at that moment I talk to myself,I like him,I would like to pay moe efforts to study english.