文中用词稍显贫乏;上下文衔接手法不熟练,没有能够有效的使用衔接词;能适当使用从句,但不够熟练;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
ambition make our stronger. when some serious problem come to our life and work, we have to figure out how to best remove it from our circle which we lived all the time. for work, we will make no any progress and fall behind others without any strict target. for life,