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I have a good friend named Ella who is my deskmate. She comes from Rizhao. She is beautiful and very kind. She often offer me a help when I have trouble. Every time you see her, she always smile. We are the best friend and always study together. Sometimes if one of us has a bad motion, another will make every effort to make she smile by service big meal. Every day is happy day when we stay together. But most important, we will encourage each other to study harder and get better grade. We promise that we will be the best friend forevermore.