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湖南衡阳市八中2013届高三5月月考试卷英语作文

发布时间:2013-05-17 17:12浏览次数:1348
要求:
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an English composition on the topic of Online Shopping. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below:
1.现在网上购物已成为一种时尚
2.网上购物有很多好处,但也有不少问题

3.你的建议

注意:字数:100左右。可适当增加细节,使行文连贯。

用户的作文(系统评分81.5分
评语:

作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;能较灵活地使用部分学术词汇,有基础拼写错误,需要注意一下;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;请注意分段。

用户练习作文:

Online shopping has become fashion.With the development of society,the customer prefers to find some different way to buy something which they need.The computer isn't to be wildly used until the improvement of technology. It is very convenient for people when they are in online shopping.For example,the customer can seek for something what they want instead of going to the supermarket or others' store.There are many kinds for people to select.But anything also have some failure.On the one hand,some online -store probably cheats customer to buy their poor quality con-sum.On the other hand,online-shopping makes more and more people lack of communication with other and people be addicted to online shopping,which is do harm to persons' health. In my opinion,people should go outside to buy something,by the way,they communicate with each other well.The most important thing is that person should appropriatly use computer.

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