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Last weekand, I interviened psychology Kelly Lam about Chinese students sharing feelings .According to the survey , however delight or depressnesss, more than 30% students unwilling to share them with other .Our education not made students to knew the importance of sharing.We lived in this era, it was important to learn sharing feelings .We should learn how to share feelings,which made good ues of our grown in the future.