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字数:300 满分:100分
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nowadays , many of us are the parents love ,they put their all of hope in ours . at the same time ,the would give ours all our want ,such as money .so it is the problem in ours .it will make our mistake our parents ,we always think that is natural.if they love me ,they should give me the best i want .in fact , it is a mistake of us , we should save our money ,and reduce parents bear in economy . now , i am a sophomore , i can understand parent in for me do not laugh by schoolmates , they work in construction site all the day .it just make me have beautiful clothes or buy something i want to own .i can remember when i was a high school student,like a bad dog , i always do what i want to do ,and spending many of pin money .but my good parent did not told me off . after one years my mother had a bad stomachache ,it just because she work hard and often lost to eat food .when i saw her pale face , i know i must be grow up .i am the hope of my parents .i can not make they disappointed .so i awake by my naive or bad dream. may be you are a lucky dog ,because you parent have a good job and you do not like me .but if you always like a naught child ,when you parents old and they could not to work , who will make a better life for them ,who will take good care them like they treat you .if you are the person like my bad youth , please don not hesitate to grow up .come back youth.