文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨;适当增加一些从句的使用,会为文章添彩;作者能较灵活地使用词汇,学术词汇使用较恰当,但存在一些拼写错误。
In recent years, the topic of parents have arranged everything for their child has increasing widely public concerns, which is becoming more and more popular. A large number of parents arrange their child's life by so many ways. As for me, I think it isn't a good idea for their child and it will bring a series of problem to them and their child, becoming the one who lack of independence in their future. In other words, they would haven't lived without their parents' helps. In view of the importance and the complexity of this phenomena, it should take some effective measures fot it. Above all, it is necessary that improving parents' awareness, and giving more space to their child. What's more, the government also make some steps for improving this situation. In addition, the school should offer some attivity to the students, making them more and more indepent.