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it is very important to improve student's mental health ,but how we improve student's m ental health ? at first ,l think the principle should be serious about this matter and take measure to solve problem . secondly , school should afford sone place and it can make student to relieve their's feeling . if we can do it ,the school can improve quality of teaching and the student can become more health ,however ,althought the school take measure is not enough ,the student should be same face their own problems ,on the one hand ,the student should be improve their phochological quality .on the other hand , the student should be get to known theirself and get out of their inferiority complex, in a word ,if we can do it ,i believe that we can get more health than before .