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If the animals are digging-out,maybe we is likely to live in the cold winter without sunlit.What a terrible thing.Animals are human beinge'closed friend,in particular,the existence of rare animals makes the whole world more colorful.Because of animals'existence,people can play with them and research the origin of animals,even furthuer'scientific research.So rare animal plays an important part in our life. Recently,I was shocked about when I heard about rare animals were harmed by human being although they live in the zoo.Some people lack of the awareness of protect-animals,or don't care about animal,which result in this truth took place. We should remember protect-animal is everyone's duty and learn its meaning.It is very important to make measures.But the most important is improving people's awareness to protect rare animals.