题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;作者能较丰富地使用学术词汇,但词汇量不大,且存在拼写错误;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
In recent years,with the increasing improvement of the internet, more and more people use computers in our common life.It is well-known that computers make the life more convenient and funny.No one can deny the fact that we cannot emphasise the importance of computers too much.If computers can think like human-beings,it may be a good thing.Nevertheless,what a terrible thing that humanbeings think like computers! Why do I say like that? To begin, people think like computers, which means that we will live a life without innovation.Thus, we will never progress.What's more, people think like computers,which makes the communication without emotion.The humor ,funny and love will gradually disappear. From what has been discussed above,we can easilly draw a conclusion that computers are significant in our dailly life, however,we cannot think like computers,and we should communicate with each other in realistic life instead of on the internet.