题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更棒;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用;请注意分段。
Life is like a roller coaster,It has its ups and downs.But it’s your choice to scream or enjoy the ride.I like this sentence very much.But most of the time,I think life more like plain boiled water,insipid.Go to work,get off work,eat,sleep,day by day.Maybe someday you meet someone then you both have a crush on each other, In the end,you getting married,have a baby, pay for house…passion,romance will ultimately be replaced of life.