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Nowadays,the internet is more and more popular.People use the internet to find something that they need,to buy anything they want to and to chating with their friends ,families even strangers and so on. I believe that the it is wise to make friends online. Althoheugh in the internet has many dangerous information and people ,we can not deny it`s benifit side.The reasons as follows: Firstly,when we are free and we do not want go outside we can chat with someone who may be a stranger . Strangers not all bad people . There are many people who like us chat online .So I think we can make friends online. I believe everybody all feel sad and do not tell families, friends and classmates and so on sometimes.We just want tell a stranger. So chating with strangers online not a bad thing.It can help relax ourselves and decrease our pressure.Sconderly, there are not many bad people in the internet,we need not too worried to chat with strangers online. So I suppose that it is wise to make friends online.
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