文中衔接词和过渡词使用的很棒;能够很好的使用长难句且句法很棒;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;请注意分段。
After traveling to Thiland,I am generally satisfied with the service of high quality.As for me,the local guides are filled with passion to those tourists,especially to old people of the group.And that they told us the funny stories clearly made a great impression on me,what is more,It expands my view of the world.However,the problem is that we dislike the food that you proved ,and finally we had to buy it by ourselves.So It will be very kind of you to offer us a good market where we can find some food with propel price.