2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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On Excessive Packaging At present,many commodity have a excessive packaging. I think there are two reasons for that.On the one hand,excessive packaging can not change foundation of commodity. But it make consumer think is very good.After all it more beautiful.Excessive packaging is more popullary than foundation about commodity.On the other hand,Excessive packaging makes bussiness improve the price of the commodity.Earn more money. Ecxcessive packging is not a good idea.In my opinion.We should avoid Excessive packaging.It not truly.we must see the foundation of the commodity and it is good for we judge the commodity.It is time to urge Excessive packging.