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The pie chart contains information about the different sporting activities participated in by male students at Hamilton University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
作者能较准确地使用学术词汇，不过存在个别拼写错误；使用了部分简单的长难句，可适当增加一些复杂的长句；行文稍显不流畅，应增加文中衔接词的使用。
The pie chart gave us information about the popular of the sporting activities are differed among male students at Hamilton University. As the pie chart mirrors,the proportion of soccer,basketball and tennis is continuesly greater than that of volleyball,swimming and athletics.More specifically,the percentage of male students who choose soccer is the most outstanding,with 30%,doubling that of students who are fond of tennis.While the basketball item rank the second,constitute 1/4 of the total male students.We can clearly notice that the item of volleyball and swimming have the same figure,with 12.5% surprisingly.In conrast,the smallest number is in Athletics(5% only). Overall,some traditional sports items are really popular among male students at Hamilton University like soccer and basketball,whose data accounts for over half of the total male students.Whereas the popular degree of Athletics is totolly different.
