2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

文中词汇表达比较多样，能多用学术词汇就更好了；句法知识很棒，若增加一些从句的使用，文章会更出色；文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用。

now people can't leave computer more and more.on the other words,the relation between people and computer get closer. on the one hand ，computer plays important part in today，on the other hand,our life need internet.however,as we all know, a coin have two sides,computer also has disadvantage.for example,some students are abandoned in online game,so they give up learning.moreover people make crime by computer.you can never image how big problem produced by internet crime. so,how do we deal with the relation between we and computer?in my view,we shouldn't be lost in computer and lose ourselves.we should make good use of the computer.and we must know computer is not our only one.