文中词汇多样性不足,学术词汇积累做的很棒;简单句比重过高,另应加强复杂句的练习;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段。
the growing trendecy among the students ignore to study Chinese.since the revolution and reforming the country connection became closing in daily. increasingly people immigrant or prepare to immigrant. the foreign culture influence deeply the Chinese. especially language. from my view. I think we should respect our culture and love our land. learning other language is a positive phenomenon , but at some time. we should not ignore our language. which is soul in our culture. we should show it in foreigner and transport china culture.