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I just have one good friend in my life ,her name is ……,we knew each oher long ago .At that time ,we are both 6 years old .She is my classmate.She is a beauteful girl ,every time i saw her ,she was smiling ,which is impressed me .she is taller than me .she like to sing and to dance .all in all ,she is a cute a girl ,i love her.