Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
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With the development of technology, telecommunication technology is used in people’s life widely. It brings convenience for people, but at the same time it also brought adverse effect. One of this is that, in the information era, with its convenient communication and fading lines between work and personal life, the people is hard to distinguish between what is work time and personal time. No mater where you are, only a message, a call or an e-mail can brings you from personal life to the work. This kind of life make people feel that the work time has occupied the personal time greatly and they are living under increasing pressure. For example, someone is playing with his little son after work, but a call from his boss makes him has to go back to the company. Otherwise, some people have to spent lots of personal time to due with clientele’ call or e-mail.