拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;可适当增加长句和复杂句的使用;全文结构较为严谨。
in recent years,a growing number of students face a common problem ,that’s the mental health.such as kill-oneself.why does it happen among students and what can we do to deal with about it? of course,there are all kinds of reasons to lead to this phenomenon.nowadays,students have too much stress,like spirit stress.as to the school,what they should do first is to add more courses about mental health,which can help let the students talk with teachers directly.besides,establishing a counsel web is necessary. we student should read more books about mental health what can help us keeping a healthy mental.the least but not least,we should open ourselves when something boring us.talking with others may be the best way to relieve our feelings.