文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但学术词汇稍显不足;作者有一定功底,可在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用。
The passage mainly tells us that F4 is well-known all over the world but no one knows how it starts.And the drama Meteor Garden has its advantages and disadvantages. After reading the passage, we can draw a conclusion that the reason why F4 are popular among young people is fashion.Like old people are crazy about reading newspaper,the young are interested in popular musics. In fact,the purpose of it is they want to relax,feel confident,and shield them from the emotinal trauma. For this,they will spent most of time watching the drama,ignoring the study.What is more,some of them will stay up late until the next day for their concerts instead of study.In my opinion,It is not great for you to addict to these popular songs if your study is getting bad.And i think if we can balance our time between the study and entertainment,it will be a happy ending.