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The passage mainly tells us that F4 is well-known all over the world but no one knows how it starts.And the drama Meteor Garden has its advantages and disadvantages. After reading the passage, we can draw a conclusion that the reason why F4 are popular among young people is fashion.Like old people love reading the newspaper,the young are interested in popular musics extremely. In fact,the purpose of it is that they want to relax,feel much confident,and shield them from the emotional trauma. In order to achieve these things,they will spend most of time watching the drama,ignoring the study.What is more,some of them will stay up late until the next day for their concerts .In my opinion,It is not great for you to addict to these popular songs when your study is getting bad.And i think if we can properly balance our time between the study and the entertainment,we will have a happy ending.