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Now,the problem is become a popular topic.The things that how ways make parents to help children to be independent . In present, some people doing every things for their children.So that some child doing things are difficulty when their along. It is dangerous things that children independent development of life and work. For help independent of child,parents used a kings of measures. Firstly,they hopes their children take part in a party with other people.And doing some things.For example,cooking,washing and so on. Secondly,parents should talk body their working things and some difficult when their at home.let's children known their father and mother try to life and work not easy things. In vacation,give children find out a work that they are doing things replace their play games,go shopping and sleeping every days. In my opinion,help children independent working and life is important.Not only parent things,but also children like doing this thing.