有效地采用了多种衔接方法,层次清晰;可适当增加从句的使用;文中词汇使用较丰富恰当,但学术词汇表达还需要很大提升。
We can see from the picture that a father asked his daughter what happened in her school today, however the girl did not tell her father directly, but said that what her dad wants to know all on her blog. This cartoon reflects a phenomenon that more and more people express their feelings and things occurring around them on the Internet.This inevitably brought about some negative effects. Firstly, one of the most obvious is that communicating on blog may lead to the decline of the ability of speaking in face-to-face.Additionally, Internet communication is very convenient, so people should not stay together when they want to talk to each other, and the distance between people becomes far than before. At last, because of lacking the speaking skill by face-to face, people may become so sensitive that people can turn angry easily. From discussed above, we can conclude that communicating on the Internet is not a wise way. We can have a blog, but it cannot replace our interpersonal communication.
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