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Even some excellent students commit crime or suicide just for something unimportant nowadays. To avoid tragedy happening again, students’ mental health must be improved. However, students’ mental health is usually ignored both by their parents and schools. What’s more, the internet and TV programs are full of violence and depravation nowadays, which are harmful to students’ mental development because students are so young that they are so susceptible to be influenced. To improve students’ mental health, I think family education is important. Parents should spend more time in chatting with their children and treat them as their friends. Secondly, some related subjects should be offered in schools and professional psychological teachers should be employed to help students relieve their depression, anxiety or pressure. Last but not the least, our medium should help to create a positive social value orientation.