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The Spring Festival Evening has been held in china over twenty yeas,so many of people thinks that's our very important festival for us.However,few people think it's opposite ,the meaning of the Spring Festival Evening is nothing,we should be canceled that.As a Chinese,i can't deny what the meaning of The Spring Festival Evening to us,because it's necessary to everyone. In this night, we can get together to watching the Spring Festival Evening.