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In my opinion, becoming a secondary teacher means another big challenge in the new century. A secondary teacher in the future is required to have many different kinds of abilities. He may have to learn a lot. As is known to all of us, society develops very fast. With the development, many changes take place. In order to adapt to the changes, students are required to learn something new and have more skills. As a secondary teacher, he must know a lot and have a good knowledge of many new aspects. So, first of all, a secondary teacher in the future has to keep pace with the development of society and have a good knowledge. Second, as we all know, nowadays, a successful person is not only good at subjects, study, but also thought. Only a helpful, kind person can succeed. So a secondary teacher in the future should not only teach students something in class, but also something in life. Above these, the teacher should also do well in communicating with students. As a secondary student, he has grown up and has his own idea, even though his idea is different from the teacher’s. A secondary teacher should not only be a teacher, but also a friend of the students. He should often talk with the students and know what they think. Only in this way they should get well with each other. In a word, becoming a secondary teacher in the future means a big challenge. But I want to face this big challenge. And I would like to be a secondary teacher in the future.