文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分;文中应增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩。
School is our second family,also we expect it should be clean and healthy,to name but a few.As the proverb goes:A good environment will act upon a person,thus,it is essential for students to creating a green campus.What's mean of 'Green Campus'?There is not only have a wonderful environment,but also good atmosphere. At present,we should the least I could do,which makes campus more and more healthy and lovely.To begin with,stop the rude behavior,such as littering and spit everywhere,or talk loudly in public.Additionally,we can garden or trees,let it increase well. In summary,we still have a long time way to go.