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I have a good friend ,her name is mary.she is contantly doing bad things ,I think that is the major problem during the primary school .take some eample ,she likes talking about bad news behind others,and she is so lazy don not do more things ,if everyong didn't told her .she is angry the things that given her on trouble.this is my friend.totally, she is good for me .