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As we all know,an unyielding will is the premise of succession.Without it,people are easily beat by hardship. Oniy a person who possesses a strong will has more opportunities to attain their goals and gain achievements.It is because that kind of men are more likely to survive after suffering from difficulties.They have a clear understanding of their tasks and always stick to them. Not only should adults have a strong will but also we students are supposed to keep an unyielding will,for that not worked hard,we wouldn't become a man of achievements.