雅思写作范文:出国旅游的利弊

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Traveling is a new way to relax ourselves,it is becoming more and more popular.We can go abroad with our beloved,travwling can make we closer.But to go a countries which you have never gone to needs a lot of preparation.Traveling can open my eyes,know more about other cultures.I love traveling.good good good good good