能够熟练使用从句并合理分配;行文稍欠流畅,应适当增加连接词的使用;文中词汇较灵活,但要注意积累学术词汇,拼写错误也要注意。
Always we say we will be the guy who we want to be,it seems if I want to become Chris Rock who is a comedy star in America,Iwill be.We dream we will achieve success just like Mayun or Chenguangju one day,but it's not a easy job.The sentence"we wil be the guy who we want to be"means if the will is so strong that we can take 100 more times' actions than others,the dream will come true ,or,it's just a dream forever. Nothing succeds without a strong will.Many of us tell others that I want to be journalist,writer or others,but whether it is your real dream or not?At our young age,our dreams had so many that we changed all the time.Even if when we grow up,the dream is always changing.Most of us really don't know which think is our favourite,as a result we can't insis on doing it.If you find out the think you love mostly,then you will find you have strong will to keep on doing it until you achieve success.If the dream is not your real dream,you will give up when you face the difficulties. In conclusion,if you want to be successful,to cultivate your hobby is the most important thing,everyone should have one thing which will keep on doing on the whole life.