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With economic quickly development,people like go shopping in their leisurely time.But,in modern society,more young people love Online shopping when their finished a day's work.Online shopping is a popular and fashion things for the increase number of younger people.This phenomenon development have a lot of reason. Firstly, people's life maybe more busy when their begin to do a new work or a new plan.Most of people have to do housework in weekend.So that they no time go shopping.secondly,we have to go shopping spend a lot of time and not make our comfortable. With knowledge level increase and be used in our daytime,Online shopping is becoming a popular things.This is a good things.because It help our save time and we can do things in every time.We can do this things in office or at home and so on.It not only comfortable and also fast than go shopping in street. In term of this reason,we find that more and more people love shopping used computer.But we know that ever coins have two sides.Online shopping made our spend more money than we not do it. Sometime things not in my plan or we are not feel we spend a lot of money. In my opinion,we should study Online shopping to save time,let's me feel more happy and comfortable.But not dependent on this way.We should spend money in our ability space.Only make our happy we can used a kind of way.
