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Internet Internet is usually an issue of controversy.Some people take no hesitation to claim that it is very useful.Among their arguments,the major one is that internet can make the study and work become more efficiently. As for the same issue,we also hear many different voices.A large number of people oppose their own reasons.In their belief,they think the internet make the younger are addicted in,and can be helpless to study. To be frank,it is very difficult for me to say which one is 100% right as both opinions make some sense.But I still find myself in former idea.I have no words for this side.A strong evidence is that at the information age,information is spread out quickly.The internet is a useful instruct.