2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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With the developement of the socialty,there is a situation that many commodities are dressed up exceeding. Why is there the situation? There are tow reasons dicided the situationo.On the one hand,the business want to get more beneficial from less commodities,the exceeding dressing make a vision that commodities is very expencive.On the other hand,the cosumer think the beauful and exceeding dressing can make their face light. In my opinion,this situation is harmful,waving and blind.People should not concerned the face and the besiness shoud not blind persue beneficial.If so,the situation will be reduced.