2011年12月英语六级作文真题:成功之路

从句用的不错，但有几处从句错误；作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇，建议要多使用学术词汇；全文结构较为严谨，应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。

In our whole life,we will have one or more goals lead us to achieve.And there are different ways to success,chooseing the right way to achieve is the important thing to whom wants to get it.Not all of the ways are to success,but it is an experience for us during the period. We all know that to do something is easy for us,but to do it good is hard.So we should make our mind before we choose the way doing the thing,what is the meaning of doing it,and how to do it,which way should we choose?These questions are the first step,when we check them out someday,then we can do the next step.The way to success is hard,but we can't be afraid of it,we should face it bravely,because our human beings can do anything,when we make our mind.We can't always wondering that in our mind,we should do it in practice.The way we choose should step by step,then someday we will see the fabulous success we get. As I say,success is not easy than we think,so we have to make hard work to let it happen,and I think if we do our best,we will get what we should get.