2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；熟练的使用了从句和复杂句；希望学术词汇的使用能更熟练一些，还要加强单词拼写的检查；请注意分段。

as we all know, computer has became a part of our life, at comtempotary sociaty, without computer, it seem to that we can't do angthing smoothly. but everything has two sides, compuer helps us to caculate complex data and brings convenience in comunicating each other, at the same time, internet crime rate has been growing up consistly, in addition, privite informition are leaked by some people who want to take use them to earn much illegal money.