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Nowadays, wherever you are, you can see that the phenomenon of excessive packaging. Using beautiful stripe and tissue paper decorate and package goods. There are sevelal causes of excessive packaging. On the one hand, many companies believed that they can attrach customers' attention and stimulate their purchasing desire by over-packaging their goods, thus gaining more profits. On the other hand, many customer mistakenly hold that the more delicate the package is, the better the quality will be, thus encouraging excessive packaging. In my opinion, I think that has bad consequences of excessive packaging, including rising interest rates or connot ensure quality and with false propaganda to deceive customers. To solving the problems, it's necessary to take the follows measures. Firstly, costomers to boycott the excessive packaging of the products. secondly, the government should enhance the strength of law enforcement and propaganda.