拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;使用了部分简单的长难句,可适当增加一些复杂的长句;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
Internet plays an important role in this information age,but now there's a fierce debate about Internet,for it has the advantages when it has the disadvantages. On the one hand,some people think Internet bring convenience to their life.When it comes to study,Internet provide learners with the lastest resources,they can get what they want with a click of mouse.What's more,workers finish work efficiently through the Internet. On the other hand,others think Internet make bad effect on teenagers.Nowadays,computer games are popular among the students,results in many of them are addicted to Internet,in a way that some of them make bad performance on the study. In my points of view,everything has two sides,and Internet is not an exception.If we can strike a balance between the study and play,we can benefit from the Internet instead of controlling by it.